"Will you allow me, or do I ask too much, to introduce my sister to your acquaintance during your stay at Lambton?" (Jane Austen)
"He who, she had been persuaded, would avoid her as his greatest enemy, seemed, on this accidental meeting, most eager to preserve the acquaintance." (Jane Austen)
It was a dreary November night, the pea-soup fog overwhelming the street lamps and cars crawling through the blackness, when I stepped off the curb and heard scuffling of dress shoes on the gritty, wet, cobblestone street, like a scene from a Bogart movie.
"It came boring out of the east, like some ribald satellite of the coming sun howling and bellowing in the distance and the long light o f the headlamp running through the tangled mesquite brakes and creating out of the night the endless fenceline down the dead straight right o f way and sucking it back again wire and post mile on mile into the darkness after where the boilersmoke disbanded slowly along the faint new horizon and the sound came lagging and he stood still holding his hat in his hands in the passing groundshudder watching it till it was gone." (Cormac McCarthy)
"He rode where he would always choose to ride, out where the western fork of the old Comanche road coming out of the Kiowa country to the north passed through the westernmost section of the ranch and you could see the faint trace of it bearing south over the low prairie that lay between the north and middle forks of the Concho River." (Cormac McCarthy)
With his arm lying gently across my back, barely touching it, and the moonlight shining through the darkness of the trees, my date and I walked along the path.
"She began now to comprehend that he was exactly the man, who, in disposition and talents, would most suit her." (Jane Austen)
"No man of common humanity, no man who had any value for his character, could be capable of it." (Jane Austen)
"To every thing there is a season, and a time for every purpose under the heavens. A time to be born, and a time to die; a time to plant, and a time to reap; a time to kill, and a time to heal; a time to tear down, and a time to build; a time to weep, and a time to laugh; a time to mourn and a time to dance." (Ecclesiastes)
forget all those things they don't want to remember, and
VARIETY IN SENTENCE STRUCTURE
Taken from THE LIVELY ART OF WRITING by Lucile Vaughan Payne
Two sentence patterns are of major importance:
Every sentence in the English language will fit into one of these categories or will be a combination of both. Once you understand the two patterns, you can write any kind of sentence you like without the slightest fear of going astray.
You can master these patterns easily if you first get a grip on one important principle: The principle of the basic statement (main idea).
The following are basic statements:
1. Bells rang.
2. Love is blind.
3. The cat scratched Sally.
4. John gave his mother flowers.
5. The teacher considered him a good student.
Every English sentence contains a basic statement. It may stand alone as one short sentence as in the examples above, or it may be buried inside a longer sentence. It is the kernel that you have left after you chop away everything in a sentence except its essential meaning; it is the kernel you build on when you want to make a sentence longer.
Basic statement: Bells rang.
Loose sentence: Bells rang, filling the air with their clangor, startling pigeons into flight from every belfry, bringing people into the streets to hear the news.
Basic statement: The teacher considered him a good student.
Loose sentence: The teacher considered him a good student, steady if not inspired, willing if not eager, responsive to instruction and conscientious about his work.
Basic statement: John gave his mother flowers.
Periodic sentence: John, the tough one, the sullen kid who scoffed at any show of sentiment, gave his mother flowers.
Basic statement: The cat scratched Sally.
Periodic sentence: Suddenly, for no apparent reason, the loveable cat scratched Sally.
THE PERIODIC (INTERRUPTIVE): In this sentence, additional details are added inside the basic statement:
Basic statement: Love is blind.
Periodic sentence: Love, as everyone knows except those who happen to be afflicted with it, is blind.
Once you have learned to recognize and use the two major sentence patterns, you can forget about adhering to them strickly. You can combine elements of both if you wish.
Suppose you are working with a short, simple sentence--A sentence reduced to the barest basic statement: John was angry.
This short sentence may sound exactly right inside your paragraph--just short enough and sharp enough to have the force you want. In that case, leave it alone. But perhaps that nagging inner ear tells you that it isn't quite right; it needs something. Thus, you make it a shade more periodic:
John was suddenly, violently angry.
Or you make it even more periodic:
John, usually the calmest of men, was suddenly, violently angry.
Or you decide to add detail at the end:
John, usually the calmest of men, was suddenly, violently angry, so angry that he lost control completely.
Now the sentence is both periodic and loose. You could shake it up still more by moving some of the detail up front:
Usually the calmest of men, John was suddenly, violently angry, so angry that he lost control completely.
Periodic structures usually expand the subject or verb. Loose structures expand the verb or object.
Expanding the Subject:
The easiest way to start the details flowing is to think of the subject as being followed by a pause. Make yourself hear that pause. It is exactly the same kind of pause that occurs in your own conversation every day, in sentences like the following. Notice these sentences are periodic (interruptive)and they expand the subjects.
That boy, the one wearing glasses, is in my history class.
This piecrust, tough as it is, tastes pretty good.
Here's another example: The class (pause) read the assignment.
The class, a mixture of juniors and seniors in advanced math, read the assignment.
The class, usually noisy and inattentive, read the assignment.
The class, with a subdued rustle of books and papers, read the assignment.
When expanding the subject, consider these methods of expansion: description, appositive, adjective, prepositional phrase, participles, etc.
Expanding the Verb:
Expand the verb by showing how its action progresses. Any phrase that tells how or when a verb acts is related grammatically to the verb.
The class read, listlessly at first, and then with growing interest, the assignment.
The class read, after trying unsuccessfully to divert the instructor, the assignment.
Expanding the Object (or the rest of the sentence):
The class read the assignment, a full chapter.
I saw Mr. Hassenfeffer, the instructor.
The class read the assignment, a full chapter, with a dismaying number of difficult-looking statistical tables.
I saw Mr. Hassenfeffer, the instructor, flat-nosed, beady-eyes, on guard every minute.
Remember, written sentences should have the sound of speech--intelligent, highly ordered speech that sounds completely natural to the listening inner ear of the reader. The means to this naturalness is through variety in sentence patterns: basic statements, loose (cumulative) sentences, periodic sentences, combinations. By learning to add detail in various ways to a basic statement, you can create any of these patterns; by alternating them, by striving consciously for variety, by listening to your sentences as well as looking at them, you can create the natural cadence of the human voice. The big obstacle that most student writers must overcome is the conviction that any sentence, once written, is an immovable and unchangeable object, like a chunk of concrete or an engraving on steel. Remember, a sentence is a thing of movable parts, an endlessly adaptable structure that is completely subject to the writer's will, shrinking or expanding to fit the sound and sense he or she chooses to give it.
So relax, loosen up. Play boldly with sentences. Combine, convert, shift, change, add, subtract, divide, multiply. Take chances. The more you experiment, the more you will learn.
Write a loose (cumulative) sentence at lest twenty words long using each of the basic statements. Do not change the basic statement; just add to it.
Using the following basic statements, write four periodic sentences at least fifteen words long:
Select four of the eight sentences you have just written and add details that will make each one a combination of the loose and the periodic.
Expand the subject on the sentence below:
Expand the verb of each of the following sentences.
Add a simple appositive to the noun at the end of each sentence below:
Using prepositional phrases and participles, add detail to each of the appositives in the four sentences you have just written. Make each sentence at least fifteen words long.